A work in progress

Hey guys it's been awhile since I've posted on TPS but I'm back and more experienced... Well this is my latest piece but I think it's missing something, It just dosn't do it for me. What do you think?

A work in progress
*note: 800x600 - 864k (Dial-ups beware)

omfgggggggggggggg
how big is that freaking file
hehehe it took pretty long for me 56ker do load it but i think it wasnt worth it dude
im not saying n e thing bad
ugh then y am i still typing?
hehehe
im stupiddddddddddd
okey enough of that
i dont like the colors doesnt blend rite to meh
and file size
i think im so crakiny is because file size
im sorry dude
im stupid
dont listen to meh

hey no prob, honesty is better than me thinking it's a great piece and showing it around - when in reaility it's not.

Just a quick reminder, I posted this because I didn't like it there is something wrong and I just can't put i finger on it. So the negitive feed back is what i'm looking for.