Look in this thread...

what do you fellaz think about this....an old friend from called me up today and asked if i could do a flyer for him...it took me about 45 minutes... i know you could all d this in five min but tell me what i could have done better...thanks fellaz....

oh yah and its not complete im missing info...

http://www.infamousonline.com/z/hip1.gif
http://www.infamousonline.com/z/hip2.gif
http://www.infamousonline.com/z/hip3.gif

****EDIT "not actual size, generated to display.."

***editt number 2 i hope i dont upset anyone...i didnt site my stock photos...forgot where i got them from.... :( sorry ill find them...(pending..)

The second one is the best of those.
Remove the clock and the pattern...(And never use that pattern again :P)
That's the first thing you will notice if the guy is a beginner or not.
Everyone uses it when they start playing with photoshop because they are "cool" but after a while you will notice that they aren't actually that cool :P
Maybe try to make it a bit more 3d...it looks pretty flat now...maybe the bottle could give a shadow on the face?

And when people says it only took me 45 minutes.
That's not what counts...it's what you make not the time it took.
And when you do flyers and things like this, I would give 100% to it...because they will probably get printed out and then you can photograph it and put it in your portfolio.
At least for me, things that are actually printed is worth so much more.
It's like making a web site template or making the whole site coded and all done.

too many strokes on the text, specially on the last one where you can hardly read the text because of it. why not finding a nice font and doing a soft shadow or outer glow at least.

I think the second is probably the best but, i like the face from the first one. Also the first one has a better flow, the images and type across and down the page, maybe combine the first and second? If there is one little issue its that the date is above the title and usually the title is top of the page because it is the most important information, but what do i know?

First, you spelled Arpil on the first one

I think the first is best, but as said, the grid sucks. Get rid of it totally (wich I'd prefer) or erase quite a large area with a very soft brush and flow. A bit more color would be nice, but you'll get away with it.

Second one is a bit overlighted, remove some overlay layers or, again, erase some of the white from them with a large smooth flowing brush.

Good luck

[QUOTE=3jorn]The second one is the best of those.
Remove the clock and the pattern...(And never use that pattern again :P)[/QUOTE]
hehe yah the grid is a cliche, i kinda wanted to use the clock i feel it has some sort of meaning with hipnotize but yeah i sorta changed it a bit.

thanks 3jorn for your comments/help


[QUOTE=kranekick]too many strokes on the text, ..... why not finding a nice font and doing a soft shadow or outer glow at least.[/QUOTE]
i decided to take ur advice and added a light drop shadow and i like it,and your right it is too hard to read i took them off the main thing but it seems too empty when i dont have the stroke, sorta like plain. but thanks for ur help too...


[QUOTE=Geassel]First, you spelled Arpil on the first one

Second one is a bit overlighted, remove some overlay layers or, again, erase some of the white from them with a large smooth flowing brush.

Good luck[/QUOTE]

fixed the new month i made up.

it does look too much of one color so i darkened it up a bit....
Thanks...

i have one question, when flyers are made is it normal to use the same style for all the fonts? or what do you guys think ?


Edit*** Here is a link woops http://www.infamousonline.com/z/hip2.gif

darn everyone is busy...sirry guys ill stop
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